[Saturday, Dec. 04, 2004][13:05]

review: chosen144

first impression: There�s quite a lot of black, and your template is contradictory.


layout: [forty-seven of forty-nine] Things look pretty simple. The white on black is somewhat overused, but classic in its own right. The hints of red you have prevent it from being completely ordinary. Your links work fine.


content: [twelve of eighty-seven] You were born in the nineties. You write comparably better than most that we�ve seen, but this doesn�t say much. You have spelling mistakes, but it happens. The biggest problem we�re seeing is that to you, your diary is a thing to do when you�re bored. If you could be doing something else, you would be, and because of this attitude, your writing is uninteresting. If you�re going to submit something in to be judged by others, it should be something you care about.
You think everything is stupid or boring. Then there�s this: �I'm having some mixed feelings about some of my friends. it's confusing, though. I don't want to talk about it though.� You don�t say that! First of all, if you don�t want to talk about something, don�t mention it at all. That�s common sense. Second of all, you desperately need to express some feelings here, and you need to do so without using the words �boring� and �stupid� or any of their derivatives. You obviously *want* people to read what you write. You openly said so. The fact of the matter is, if you can�t produce something that will spark even an iota of interest, you aren�t going to build up an audience.
You�re barely even fourteen-years-old. It�s sad that the �life sucks, the world hates me� thing has already kicked in. Life is hard. You won�t get the majority of things you want. You�ll think you�re in love when you aren�t. You�ll feel that everyone is against you, when most of them probably are completely wrapped up in their own lives. Thus, the world doesn�t hate you, and life only sucks if you choose to see it negatively.


frequency: [twenty of twenty-two] You write constantly, but only out of boredom.


judgement: �Tanning is bad for you. Also, we�re aware that you�re young, but you should work on gaining some perspective, and buy a thesaurus while you�re at it.�


[seventy-nine of one hundred fifty-eight]
[fifty percent]
[Miss Lisa]

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