[Wednesday, Sept. 22, 2004][]

review: shefoofights

first impression: Ack. So much pink. It looks as if we�re dealing with a punk. A female punk. A day logging, female punk. That�s just the impression we�re getting here.

layout: [eighteen of thirty points] There�s a lot of pink. The picture you�re using is blurry, and for some of us, required a change of screen resolution to actually distinguish the overly pink punk angel from a miscellaneous dark colored spot on your layout.

Your rings link? Doesn�t work. Your notes? They aren�t turned on, yet you still have a link for them. Fix that.

content: [thirteen of sixty points] You seem to have somewhat good grammar and punctuation and all that jazz. That�s one of the few pluses of your diary. You spend so much time writing about what you�re listening to. It�s understandable to have a fondness for music, but there�s no need to go on and on about it every single day. You�ve admitted that your diary is a boredom diary, and you make it obvious. When you write, you appear to not have a problem in the world. This is both pleasing and distressing. Younger people often don�t have severe problems. Once they reach a certain point, they�ll talk about all sorts of problems they have until the reader wants to shoot themselves in the face. The youth of the world jumps from carefree to angst ridden in a short amount of time, and quite a few of these people end up writing online diaries. People like reading about interesting things. It�s difficult to have an interesting life until you�ve lived for a while. So you aren�t a whiner, which is good, but your diary just isn�t interesting.

frequency: [ten of ten points] You don�t go long periods without updating, but you haven�t had this diary too long.

judgement: This point has been stressed enough here, but when it comes to emotions in the public diary world, there�s a fine line between drought and flood. That�s to say, most will either completely leave them out, and others will share just a little too much. You have great potential, but you should shimmy over to the other side of the spectrum and see what comes out of it.

[forty-one]

[forty-one percent]

[Miss Lisa]

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