[Tuesday, Sept. 14, 2004][]

Review: headcasebaby

first impression: There are pretty colors all over the place and no brightness to harm the eyes. There will be no blinding on this day. And, look, there are capital letters and punctuation! Also, nothing about your writing is brazenly annoying. Bravo.

layout: [twenty-four of thirty points] Your layout is dark. It isn't depressing dark, because of all the lovely colors that we see. Overly bright layouts are a headache.

Your picture is of the blurry sort, but it�s difficult to decide if it�s supposed to look exactly like that. The picture is appealingly fluorescent though.

You have one scrollbar inside of another. Double scrollbars are gross. There's also a need to scroll horizontally if we wish to read all that you keep to the right. Horizontal scrollbars are also gross.

While going through your links, we notice that your guestbook page and your older entries page have a different image than the others. The gray bat isn't attractive at all. Also, your rings page has its links at the bottom of the page. Other than that, your links seem to work. You give credit to TEF designs, though you edited it yourself.

content: [twenty of sixty points]Your beginning entries are like whispers of an angst ridden teenager. You use capitals and you punctuate, which is always a plus. We read your most recent entry, and then went to the beginning. Only a few entries in, it feels rather monotonous. There's feeling in there somewhere, but it isn't on the surface and isn't easy to find. It's as if your entries have a notion of emotion. Incidentally, you wrote about this in your daylog entry. It's a terrible shame that you don't get more into what your feeling. Maybe we just aren't seeing it. It'd be wonderful to see your insides all over the internet. Of course, that's meant in a completely non-literal manner. Your entries aren't something one can get lost in. It feels as though it would be more appealing to the people you've met in real life. Captivating complete strangers isn't easy to do. It's all a matter of perspective. After reading the beginning, we skipped around, reading your middle and newer entries, and no drastic changes in writing seem to appear.

frequency: [nine of ten points] You skip a few days, you write multiples. You're on, you're off. It probably all averages out to an entry a day or so.

bonus points: [two points] You once said your computer was fucky. Miss Lisa will always giggle at unusual placement of the word 'fuck' because she is a child.

judgement: You seem younger than you are. At your age, that can be taken as an insult, but wait until you're sixty. There's feeling in your writing somewhere. Also, you weren't as angsty as you first appeared. That's a good thing.

[fifty-five of one hundred]

[fifty-five percent]

[Miss Lisa]

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