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[Tuesday, Sept. 14, 2004][]
Review: headcasebaby first impression: There are pretty colors all over the place and no brightness to harm the eyes. There will be no blinding on this day. And, look, there are capital letters and punctuation! Also, nothing about your writing is brazenly annoying. Bravo. layout: [twenty-four of thirty points] Your layout is dark. It isn't depressing dark, because of all the lovely colors that we see. Overly bright layouts are a headache. content: [twenty of sixty points]Your beginning entries are like whispers of an angst ridden teenager. You use capitals and you punctuate, which is always a plus. We read your most recent entry, and then went to the beginning. Only a few entries in, it feels rather monotonous. There's feeling in there somewhere, but it isn't on the surface and isn't easy to find. It's as if your entries have a notion of emotion. Incidentally, you wrote about this in your daylog entry. It's a terrible shame that you don't get more into what your feeling. Maybe we just aren't seeing it. It'd be wonderful to see your insides all over the internet. Of course, that's meant in a completely non-literal manner. Your entries aren't something one can get lost in. It feels as though it would be more appealing to the people you've met in real life. Captivating complete strangers isn't easy to do. It's all a matter of perspective. After reading the beginning, we skipped around, reading your middle and newer entries, and no drastic changes in writing seem to appear. bonus points: [two points] You once said your computer was fucky. Miss Lisa will always giggle at unusual placement of the word 'fuck' because she is a child. judgement: You seem younger than you are. At your age, that can be taken as an insult, but wait until you're sixty. There's feeling in your writing somewhere. Also, you weren't as angsty as you first appeared. That's a good thing. [fifty-five of one hundred] [fifty-five percent] |